【08.11.01】 歌词翻译大奖赛公告（参赛视频18、19楼）(比赛结果已公布～）

vichida

翻译大人，正在开始译．带点民歌风味的，又被翻成英文，转了两道手，好像没什么感觉，偶又是音盲．哎，要是懂泰文好些．
袖子亲也来，太好了．这活适合你干．

lily_zl

我们尽力而为就好了。本来就没有最佳翻译一说，只能更精益求精。

aoiwang

主题曲参赛译稿
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! I9 J! c/ W* y" jThe only thing I’ve never revealed to you
0 V( L1 T' F0 ~. ^' ?That I’ve concealed within my heart is that I love you
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我想我從未表露出
# G4 a3 \) J2 M, o1 u深藏在我心底的那句
我愛你  

From the first moment we met,
) h0 \2 ~8 F4 t$ iI already loved you with all my heart
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: ~; }  z) }" H, I! N在遇見你的第一刻
/ D; ]/ s( k/ P' ?. }9 h( u! o/ Y你已經深深的佔領了
6 F$ X/ ~9 g/ ^9 j$ L6 a+ s) V! T我的心

) i: }$ A* g, K9 EWe meet and talk everyday,
But we’ve never discussed the matters of the heart
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縱然朝夕相處
6 N8 |8 w2 K+ w1 [' y- [& d還是不能肯定你的心意
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If I gazed into your eyes and searched your soul,
I would probably know how you feel
凝視著你的眼
搜尋著你的魂
9 \; L: S% S4 {& F* v我也許就能了解
你的心情

- t) h& ^! [" [1 G4 p$ ^' l$ `Love… just the word love
Why is it so difficult to express?
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愛  簡單的一句愛
為什麼
如此難以表白?

I want to confess that I love you,
But I never did
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' c1 M3 F. [( x愛你 想要告訴你
卻總是說不出來

6 h( ^- s9 [. BOne day you’ll probably slip through my fingers
也許有一天
你將從我指間滑漏

$ [5 c6 p* x! [1 u7 x9 S; I# N$ g' l, g. hIf today isn’t too late,
I want to reveal something my heart has been waiting to confess

希望今天還不會太晚
; k  Q  ?/ J$ C; }3 N! c讓我向你表白
我心底的秘密
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; L+ D6 }5 r/ [I don’t want my love to turn into something that will just drift away

  t- E% ?! C. p6 d/ B% U5 ]  i不要讓我的深情 隨風而逝
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Can I entrust it to you?
Entrust my love within your heart
可否讓我托付給你?
5 g9 [# W' k5 p& b托付我的愛
收在你心裡

6 h+ g. Q- ~. x: u# x" MLove… just the word love
( ^" C- L2 x. T+ d* a6 oWhy is it so difficult to express?

愛  簡單一句愛
為什麼如此難以表白?

  |; h' T' S; x7 Q: D2 HI want to confess that I love you,
6 B0 m; E8 j* v$ ^1 Y, _But I never did
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* S3 U; ^% Y+ L% K2 p. K( d& q3 n愛你 我想要告訴你
- P0 z) [9 |5 N7 L$ }# |卻還是說不出來

One day you’ll probably slip through my fingers

; _  P# U6 l# _' N也許有一天
你將從我指間滑漏
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If today isn’t too late,
I want to reveal something my heart has been waiting to confess
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希望今天還不會太晚
9 E  a( ^3 T% d6 k2 ?3 g讓我向你表白
; ~; }* D( `) s& E1 Q8 h我心底的秘密

; K  a  K6 ]0 G; D8 u- WI don’t want my love to turn into something that will just drift away

不要讓我的深情 隨風而逝

, ?7 a3 A; W1 I6 o4 pCan I entrust it to you?
Entrust my love within your heart

9 f* c7 h9 r& R可否讓我托付給你?
托付我的愛
" |7 [. |) ^: t( Y# I3 A收在你心裡

Can I entrust it to you?
Entrust my love within your heart

可否讓我托付給你?
) f! R4 }1 ^& Z$ Z3 J0 s2 P托付我的愛 收在你心裡


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对唱曲参赛译稿
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The moonlight is shining brightly,
Making the sky glitter like gold,
When I gaze at it, my heart fills with happiness

0 A1 V1 [( Z1 S( |$ h5 J7 ~  Q皎潔月光下
& N! Q0 c/ K+ p2 N5 J. E天空金銀閃爍
凝視著星空
我心充滿快樂

% L2 j  [) I8 SThe moon is shining brightly in my eyes
The sky is happy down to its soul
With the moon kissing it every night
" s6 y, v# j! f7 A6 YSeeing the sky content with its love
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( A* X( ~- X! v! d  I月光映在我的眼底
- s7 q8 _* u# b月夜陪著我一起沉醉
月光輕吻著夜幕
星空充滿著歡樂

It fills my heart with worry I fear our love will turn sour

$ v* E( n! f' X我心卻充斥著憂鬱
害怕我們的愛
終將逝去

7 u8 z; E( s& \; b9 l3 p( d5 r- BYou needn’t fear anything
- c% L) N* A* s" PMy love is filled with happiness, loving you steadily

你勿須擔心憂鬱
. ]/ P# _: v/ Q我心充滿著歡欣
: P- w$ T' B! o) e& G) V愛你
" p$ H# w1 b4 r& v堅定不渝
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9 r& G8 }2 q; EEvery other word you utter is love
I really want to know just how much you love me

& D0 {) `7 |% o7 t. j, Z你的一言一語都是愛
9 k; T$ {8 @# _, T% [我真的想知道你到底愛我多少

I love you I love you with all my heart
1 O5 }" Y, Z+ f/ MNothing can compare to my love
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" r+ i- ^! x6 D  t9 b. l) c- n我的愛 全心全意
( X& a. a, |# l3 T你要知道 我的愛無與倫比
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1 P2 o# M' i2 U0 C6 gCan it even fill up half the sky, P’?

1 J1 J5 c" w( ~3 L0 |6 M能覆蓋半個天空嗎?
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3 U% x6 Y; h6 `6 mThe whole sky couldn’t even reach half my love
" T" Z) b$ s: }( ~7 i; v( J( h整個天空 也不及我一半的愛
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I want so much to see inside your heart

9 u2 ]) f) Q6 b) y8 f# t我想看透你的心

# G7 r# {" D, `0 w' v3 qI invite you to rip it out
To prove my love, I’m willing to die
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' X) |! N/ t7 r0 n( R( z, M* ]' z( c我歡迎你將它打開
$ q6 y/ Z3 }2 {# f  v+ K- T1 z我願意用生命
來證明我的愛

I’m still filled with fear
2 S$ C3 v1 T1 yYour glib answers are like 100 silver tongues

我依然滿心憂鬱
7 @0 E8 k' i0 W0 x你千百張口 銀般閃爍的巧語
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0 {$ g' Z; i( z/ G* s$ TI regret not dying
I only have one tongue
' J" \% Q9 ~. f8 d0 x% FIt’s nothing close to 100,000
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6 y. Y! a" c# F3 `5 N可惜我未能以死證明
我只有一張口
遠遠不及千萬
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+ S+ @9 X3 k, k) GWith such a tongue as yours,
% ?6 s4 `. u9 n7 f9 I2 V' KYour speech can’t even keep up with it
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這樣一張巧舌
你的言語都跟不上

If I have a hundred, I will tell you 100,000 things
* ^4 L7 h0 w+ A, ~2 A) e7 J如果我真有千百張口
我將對你訴說
千萬個心思
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Rambling on about a thousand words of love
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2 a, |% |- P3 O7 Q7 t8 W訴說千萬個
' ]8 {* b7 T: C; ]# I% ~5 w' K愛的心思

杏花疏影

对唱歌感觉是民歌小调，很热烈，很难译。就民歌风格来说（不知道是不是真的是民歌），要比流行歌讲究对仗，并且隐喻很多，个人感觉对唱的这一首翻译难度比主题曲大。话说这首对唱歌可真热烈啊，呵呵！也向对楼主说 ...
. V# e" o1 }5 Q6 y4 S" L) I0 Fxxiuzi 发表于 2009-1-1 03:11

% b  `* \4 Y8 ?' m( r( V是啊，不知对唱歌词有没有俚语在里面。

vichida

哦呀，你们都贴在这里，偶昨晚贴在那个歌词的帖子后面了。老大，谢谢提醒